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The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.
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The given bar and line graph illustrate the average monthly
temperature
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 and bathing
suit
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 sales in New York City for the first 6 months of 2012.
Overall
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, the
sale
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 of bathing suits experienced a gradual
increase
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 followed by a sharp decrease.
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, the
temperature
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 experienced an
increase
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. The average bathing
suit
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sale
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 stood at 100 hundred
thousand
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 US
dollars
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 in January, and the
sale
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 experienced a slight
increase
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 in
february
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February
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 and reached around 150 Hundred
thousand
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 US
dollars
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. Meanwhile, the
temperature
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 of
bathing
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the bathing
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suit
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 stabilized at around 30F
at
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during
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this
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 period. In March, the
sale
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 of bathing suits increased to 150
dollars
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 and
then
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 in April the
sale
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 reached its peak, which was 280 hundred
thousand
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dollars
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.
However
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, in the next month, May, the bathing
suit
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 sales experienced a rapid decline and reached around 80 hundred
thousand
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 US
dollars
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. In June, it declined to 60 hundred
thousand
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 US
dollars
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. From March to June the
temperature
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 of
bathing
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the bathing
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suit
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 experienced an
increase
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 and reached approximately 65F.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, suit, sale, increase, thousand, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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