The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing of ready-to-eat noodles.
This
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involves eight steps to manufacture spaghetti which
begin
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with flour added with other materials to make noodle
discs
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. After frying and adding spices, the noodles are packed and sealed as cup shells.
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, a food truck is attached to storage silos to obtain a large quantity of flour. In the next step, flour is added to the mixer
along with
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water and oil.
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, the mixer converted these ingredients into dough which gets transferred to conveying belts to roll out into large sheets of dough. Eventually, the dough sheets are cut out as strips to give them the shape of
discs
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. In the fifth step, these
discs
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are fried in cooking oil followed by the process of drying. After that, noodle
discs
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in cups are ready with a mixture of vegetables and spices. At
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, labels are used for labelling the cups.
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, noodle cups are sealed for marketing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words discs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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