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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the majority of people study specific subjects in their country, especially
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 like doctors and engineers. Some believe that they are supposed to
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 where they have trained,
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. others argue that it is not essential and they should be free to choose.
This
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 essay will elaborate on the reasons. On the one hand, there are severe advantages for
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 where they did their training. For doctors, abilities to
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 on a specific disease in that particular country is genuinely crucial, as it enhances skill and familiarity.
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, professors in different regions
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 various lessons that
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 for the exclusive countries, which
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 for culture.
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 strategy impact on how doctors communicate with parents
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 and
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 makes their parents feel comfortable and convenient.
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, letting them choose their own occupation seems to bring benefits and delight to the worker. No one can deny that, giving professional
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 in place that
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won't lead to a deep passion.
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, working with passion tends to increase the potential for
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.
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, some might gain experiences,
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, and training,
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! develop those abilities to where they studied In conclusion,
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 working where they want may expose some experiences and be more enjoyable, working where they did training is still suitable for that particular country and utilizes exact knowledge from training. Personally, I believe that professionals should be required to
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where they started.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly outline both views and give a preview of your opinion. You can improve this by clearly stating the reasons for both sides.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs for each point. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
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Try to provide one or two specific examples or details to support your arguments. This will make your points stronger and more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with grammar and punctuation, as some sentences are unclear due to these issues. Review your sentences for correct structure.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and presents both views, which is good for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear conclusion, which summarizes your opinion effectively.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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