The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The figure illustrates how electricity
produces
from one type of coal, so There are various steps which will be discussed.
Wrong verb form
is produced
Overall
, it is clear that
in the first step a variety amount of coal, which is mined successfully, transfers
to the gasifier by truck, and Wrong verb form
is transferred
then
after persuading some steps, such
as cooling and cleaning, finally
electricity Add a missing verb
is produce
produce
.
First of all, a variety amount of coal is mined and crushed, Replace the word
produced
then
it is carried to the factory by truck. It is noticeable that,
Gaz is produced and after cooling in the factory, some waste is divided.
Remove the comma
apply
Conversely
, in the factory gases, which are separated from waste gases produce power plants. Finally
, excessive amounts of electricity produce dramatically. As a result
, these amounts of production are used for both factories and residential areas.Submitted by mahanz on
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