The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs
illustrates
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the total percentage of films
releases
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and the total of ticket
sales
in 1996 and 2006 in a country.
Overall
, the most type
genre
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that
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released
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is
drama
,
however
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however,
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the
popular
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most popular
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movies
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movie
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in
a
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the
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country is
a
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apply
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comedy
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comedies
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. In terms
on
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of
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films released, it shows a significant
increased
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in most of the genres except romance. The
drama
movies
became the highest with over 25% in 1996 and increased to 35% in 2006.
This
trend
also
applied to
comedy
and
fantasy
with
comedy
from 20% to 25% and
fantasy
with around 12% to over 15% in 2006.
The romance
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Romance
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movies
on the other
hands
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,
shows
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a stable percentage over the years with only around 6%. Despite the
drama
movies
being the highest film released, the most popular
movies
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movie
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in
a
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the
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country is
comedy
with 20% ticket
sales
in 1996 and rose to around 23% in 2006.
Similarly
, the ticket
sales
in
drama
and
fantasy
movies
also
rose with
drama
approximately
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15% to 16% and
fantasy
from around 3% to 4% in 2006.
In contrast
, the
sales
of romance
movies
decrease
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decreased
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from 5% in 1996 to less than 3% in 2006.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, drama, movies, comedy, fantasy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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