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The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and the chart below show the numer of students choosing different kinds of courses in a university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates both genders choosing six different subjects in a university, in the year 2012.
Overall
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, the total number of
students
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 showed a declining pattern. Female
students
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 choose social sciences, Health and Humanities more as
compare
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compared
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 to male
students
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.
While
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 the Engineering and
science
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 and
maths
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 courses had more male ratio. The graph of male and female
students
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 shows fluctuations throughout the subjects. Almost 4000
students
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 were enrolled in the Social Sciences as compared to the male figures, which are nearly 3000. In the Engineering and
Science
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 and
Maths
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 courses, the male group dominated the classes, with nearly 2500 pupils in Engineering and 1500 in
Science
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 and
Maths
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 respectively.
on the other hand
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, around 1000 female
students
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 were recruited in Engineering and nearly 800
students
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 were given admission in the
Science
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 and
Maths
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 subjects. The Health and Humanities courses had almost the same number of female
students
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,
that is
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 around 1900,
while
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 the male pupils ratio stayed under 1000. Agriculture is the only subject in which equal numbers of both genders were enrolled, which is less than 1000
students
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, science, maths with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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