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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You recently made a journey by train. When you got on the train, you realised you had left a bag on the platform. Write a letter to the station manager. In your letter: • give details of where and when you left the bag • describe the bag and its contents • suggest how you could get the bag back

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Dear Sir or Madam, Hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am Simran Clarks, a passenger of the Scotland Express,
train
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 number 123456, which departed from Victoria station on 12th November 2024 at 8am. I am writing
this
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 letter to bring to your kind notice that after the
train
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 started for its destination, I realised that I had had only two bags
thus
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 leaving back one
bag
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 on
the
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platform number 1. I recollect that I left my home with three
lugguage
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luggage
 bags and that I had all of them with me
while
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 I was boarding the
train
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. But,
due to
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 the rush of people getting
down from
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on
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 the
train
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, I missed
to put
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putting
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 the third
bag
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 inside. The
bag
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has been
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was
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 left on platform number 1 on the 12th of November at 7.55 am,
where
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 the
last
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 compartment of the
train
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 halts
, .
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 The
bag
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 which has been forgotten is light blue in colour with an American Tourister brand logo on its front side at the top. The
bag
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's handle has a pink ribbon tied to it with a personalised name logo at its end.
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, the
bag
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 weighs approximately 15 kgs consisting
majorly
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 of clothes, footwear and some food items. I will be returning to London in 5 days on the 17th November and wish to collect the forgotten
lugguage
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luggage
 myself.
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 will help me recognise my own
bag
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 and check if anything has been stolen from the
bag
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. Thank you for your
assisstance
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assistance
. Yours faithfully, Simran Clarks.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure each paragraph addresses a single idea to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing the content more clearly, with distinct sections for each bullet point, for a more logical structure.
task response
Your letter provides a clear and detailed description of the bag, which aligns well with the requirement to describe the bag and its contents.
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The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for addressing a station manager, which matches the suitable writing tone criterion.
coherence and cohesion
The letter opens with a polite greeting and concludes with a respectful closing, enhancing the overall presentation.
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