Some people believe that to become successful at a sport requires a natural ability, others think that hardwork and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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play a significant role in our life .
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helps us to keep our
body
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fit and healthy.Some individuals say that achieving success in
sports
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need
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a
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apply

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natural skills.
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,others believe that
hardworking
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hard work

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and
practising
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is
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the most
cruical
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for
gaining
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the goal
in
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sports
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.
This
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essay will
elaboratre
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elaborate

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on both these
point
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of view and argue the favour of the latter.
To begin
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with,some
individualS
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individuals

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have the natural
ability
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in the field of
sports
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.They like to
deveolp
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develop

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their
ability
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in
an
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easisest
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easiest

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way without any long
practise
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practice

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.
Moreover
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,they try to get more
informatiom
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information

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from the people who are always
depend
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on the
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sport
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sports

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activities
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.
For instance
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,Messy is one
othe
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well-known
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football
palyer
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players

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in the world.
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, people considered him based on their
ability
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rather than physical
ability
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.So,
ability
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is one of the main
part
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parts

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in
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sport
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sports

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activities
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. On the other side,experience
is
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also plays

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also
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plays a significant role in
sports
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.some
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sport
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sports

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activities
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like
swimmimg
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swimming

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,running and jumping need special
practices
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practice

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and
hardwroking
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hard work

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.
Thus
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,people are spending
lot
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of money and time
for
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practising
sport
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.
Hence
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, they attend
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sport
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training in some institutions.
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,
American
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sport
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association
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is one of the
renownwed
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renowned

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academy
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academies

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for
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sport
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trainees.In
this
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institutite
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institute

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trainers
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basic knowledge
for
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sports
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.
This
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wil
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will

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help the individuals to participate
incompetition
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in competition

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level. In conclusion,
natrural
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natural

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ability
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is require
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is required

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for success in
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sport
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sports

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activities
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.
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,I believe that regular
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sport
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sports

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practise
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practice

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and experience
is
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are

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the most important
thing
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things

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for
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to

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Coherence and Cohesion
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Response
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Task Response
Provide a more detailed and balanced discussion of both views to strengthen your argument.
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Excellent choice of examples, such as referencing a famous sports personality like Messi.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion present.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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