The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors-agriculture, manufacturing and businessand financial service-to the uk economy in the twentieth century summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors-agriculture, manufacturing and businessand financial service-to the uk economy in the twentieth century summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The chart displays the collaboration of the economic
sectors
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for a hundred years in British.
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, the agricultural sector declined steadily with an oscillating trend,
however
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, other
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were consistently dropping for manufacturing and rising for business and finances. Despite
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, the total of those two
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was same level with different periods. Agricultural donations to the UK economy began in 1900 at around 50%
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and climbed to a precise level in 1950.
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, percentation of
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sector sank deeply achieving around 10% in 1975, and almost 0% in 2000. Manufacturing gave almost 40% in 1900, and gradually dropped to lower 40% in 1950, around 30%, and
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lower than 20% in the new millennium.
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, the business and financial
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climbed up consistently beginning with more than 0% in 1900, around 10% in 1950, a high point to jumping to 30% in the Internet era with a rise of 20% in the baby boomers era.
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