Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sports, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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this
modern era,
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in
technology
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most
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the
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individuals ignore outdoor
sports
and spend half of
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time using mobile phones.
However
,
Sports
play
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vital role in every
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life.
Moreover
, Today
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want to share my views
on
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two different
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perspective
perspectives
, where some people believe that physical
stregth
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strength
is more important as
compare
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to mental health. So, In upcoming
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i
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will discuss
both
views. Some individuals believe that to achieve success in
sports
physical
strength
is more important. One of the major
reason
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for assuming
this
is because in every game every individual needs high stamina or
strength
and without these, they can not able to survive
For example
, In football all players need good
strength
to complete
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toatal
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total
90
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minutes of the game and in
this
90 minutes anything can happen
such
as injury and for
recovring
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recovering
form that they need high
strength
.
In addition
, It seems very universal that whenever there is a selection for any sport most of the selectors choose those persons who have high physical
strength
.
On the other hand
, there are
also
several people who think that mental health plays an important role in
sports
. First of all,
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are many games in which people need more mental
strength
, One of the best
example
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is Chess, When a person is playing chess they need their all mental
strength
to defeat their opponent.
Secondly
, mental
strentgh
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strength
is
also
important because it believe that when
person
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is
mentaly
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mentally
strong they can win
losing
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a losing
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game
also
Such
as, In football if one team
scored
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2 goals in
first
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half it will directly impact the mental health of
opponent
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the opponent
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team and they will loose confidence or they will believe they are going to loose.
However
, If
team
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the team
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have high mental
strength
they will try to win until
last
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minutes of the match. In my opinion, I believe that
both
physical and mental strengths are important because a
sportman
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sportsman
always
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incomplete if they do not have
both
of the skills.
In addition
, for competing in hard
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situations
situtations
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situations
person needs physical
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strengths
strength
strentghs
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strength
and to give
best
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performance under stress they need mental
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strength
strentgh
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strength
So I think that
both
view
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are equally
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important
imporant
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important
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coherence cohesion
Try to avoid repetition by using synonyms or different phrases to express similar ideas.
task achievement
Make sure all examples are directly relevant and well-explained to enhance understanding.
coherence cohesion
You could combine short sentences for a more sophisticated sentence structure.
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The essay addresses both views on the topic as required.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, following a logical structure.
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Relevant examples, such as football and chess, are used to illustrate key points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical strength
  • endurance
  • athlete
  • performance
  • injury prevention
  • mental strength
  • pressure
  • focus
  • high-stakes situations
  • mental game
  • resilience
  • setbacks
  • recover
  • motivated
  • foundation
  • longevity
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