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The picture show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feathures.

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The diagram shows how tomato ketchup is made, starting with picking
tomatoes
 and ending with selling
it
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 in stores.
First,
ripe
tomatoes
 are picked and put into baskets.
Then
, they are checked to remove the bad ones, and only good
tomatoes
 are kept. After that, the
tomatoes
 are sent to a factory by truck. In the factory, the stalks, seeds, and skin of the
tomatoes
 are removed. The good parts are crushed to make a paste.
Next,
sugar, vinegar, and salt are added to the paste.
This
 mixture is boiled and
then
 left for two hours to settle.
After
this
, the ketchup is put into bottles. The bottles are
labeled
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, and quality control is done to make sure everything is correct.
Finally
, the bottles are packed, sent to supermarkets, and sold. People can
then
 enjoy the ketchup with food like hamburgers and fries.
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clarification
Ensure to elaborate slightly more on the step where 'the mixture is boiled and settled,' as this could provide more clarity for readers.
summarization
Try to summarize the process in your conclusion more broadly to encapsulate the entire structure, adding a reflective remark.
logical flow
The essay clearly describes each step in the process with logical flow from one step to the next.
introduction conclusion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the process, showing a clear start and end to how ketchup is made.
detail inclusion
Task is well-achieved with specific details on ingredients and their roles within the process.

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