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The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided picture depicts a
school
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 plan and its transformations during a
thirdy-year
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third-year
 period, spanning from 1985.
To begin
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,
in
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on
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 the
down side
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downside
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 of the
school
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, The size of
a
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the
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 playing ground was reduced, and
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instead
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instead,
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sport
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sports
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 facilities like
pool
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a pool
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 and fitness centre were constructed.
Moreover
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, a part of
playing
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the playing
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 field was replaced by
class rooms
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classrooms
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; before construction, classes were held in a two-storey classroom block
along with
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 another separate
bulding
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building
, but
currently
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currently,
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 there are two detached parts for classrooms.
Moreover
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, the classroom block was
subistituted
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substituted
 by a new three-storey classroom block. A library existing
in
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on
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 the left side of the
school
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,
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apply
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 changed to contemporary facilities; a computer room within a
llearning
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learning
 resource centre
are
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is
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 offering service to the pupils. In the past, apart from an area in the entrance specified for
carparking
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car parking
,
their
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there
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 was an additional place for cars next to classrooms, but now, that area is an empty area.
Besides
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, The office building has been working
same
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the same
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 as
the
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in the
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 past located at
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the to-left
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to-left
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top-left
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 corner of the
school
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. There is another less significant change; the shape of
parking
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the parking
a parking
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 lot
in
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at
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 the entrance of the
school
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 was altered to
oval
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an oval
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 one.
Overall
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, there was a remarkable alteration in most parts of the
school
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;
however
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, some buildings are the same similar
to
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in
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 1985.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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