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The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided graph illustrates percentages of drinking habits among individuals in
United
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 from an
age
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 perspective.
Overall
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, the graph indicates that the majority of drinking habits in the US population never
consuming
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 alcohol.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of never-drinkers exceeds 50% to 60% across all
age
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groups
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, with the exception of the 64-74
age
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 group.
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, there is a notable increase in the population of ex-drinkers, rising by approximately 5% to nearly 10% among young.
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, the senior citizen
age
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groups
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an
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 increase of about 20%.
Additionally
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, the proportion of light drinkers in the 1624 and 25-34
age
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groups
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 remains relatively stable, around 25%-%,
while
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 decreasing in older
age
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groups
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.
Moreover
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, there is
modest
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a modest
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 rise in heavy drinkers within the 35-44 and 45-
age
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groups
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, exceeding 10% compared to other
age
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 segments. In conclusion, the drinking habits of the US population exhibit fluctuations across different
age
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groups
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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