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the figure give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of catagories. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and take comparisons where relevant.

the figure give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of catagories. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and take comparisons where relevant.
#figure #information #growth #household #expenditure #range #catagories #summarise #features #comparisons
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The figures below provide information about the economic
growth
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 and
household
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expenditure
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 in 6 different
category
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categories
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 from 1995 to 2010.
In
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Overall
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overall
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 only two categories , food and housing ,
has
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have
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 changed  in these years the others
doesnt
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doesn't
 face
with
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apply
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a
noticable
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noticeable
 change. From 1995 to 2000 economic
growth
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didnt
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didn't
 see any big
diffrences
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differences
difference
 and the process is very steady,
its
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it's
it is
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 about 3 and in
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household
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the household
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expenditure
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the
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apply
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just only the proportion of housing and food has changed.From 2000 to 2005 the changes
are
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were
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 not very
noticibale
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noticeable
 but
the
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in the
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last
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 3 years the economic
growth
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 faced
with
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apply
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a
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apply
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rapid
growth
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.
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However
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However,
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 we can see that effect in the breakdown
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household
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of household
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expenditure
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 as well. As
a
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an
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example
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example,
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 the percentage of clothing
and
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apply
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entertainment and housing
have
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has
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 grown
up
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apply
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.In the
last
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 part of the figures, from 2005 to 2008,at the
beginning
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beginning,
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 we can demonstrate
significant
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a significant
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decresing
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decreasing
 and it reached the negative
grownth
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growth
about
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of about
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 5 .
Although
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 for the rest of the time ,2008 to 2010, it has
rosen
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risen
 and reached 0 which in
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household
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the household
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expenditure
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 the
diffrences
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differences
difference
 can be seen in just clothing, entertainment and travel.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, household, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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