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Band 3.5

youth adults are now choosing to wait until later in life ofen until they are in their 30s to settle down and get marriage

Nowadays, the youth is waiting till their 30s to get married and to settle their
future
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 benefits and issues, which are elaborated on below in the paragraphs.
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 with, there is one of the best advantages of late marriage is, that the person becomes emotionally mature. Which helps in understanding both partners to develop a strong and healthy relationship.
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, a person gets enough time to secure his
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 financially.
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, people can achieve their
future
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 goals, with their partner when there is better understanding and respect among them.
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, health issues are the biggest drawback of late marriages.
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, people have
problem
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to conceive
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 a child.
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, in
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, these issues lead to misunderstandings,
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and broken
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 marriages.
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adults have their own mindsets, sometimes they
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 to adjust to the new environment
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 leads to family disputes, and fights with partners.
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, late-life marriages give many opportunities to a person to grow personally and financially but they have some consequences with lead to failed and toxic marriage relationships because of their rigid behaviour.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention statistical data or studies about the effects of late marriage on personal development or health issues.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph flows logically. Use transitional phrases more frequently to connect your ideas more cohesively.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, making your points clear from the start and wrapped up neatly at the end.
task achievement
You address both the benefits and drawbacks of waiting until later in life to get married, which shows a balanced approach to the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • settle down
  • marital union
  • cohabit
  • nuptials
  • delay marriage
  • postponing matrimony
  • life trajectory
  • financial independence
  • commitment
  • prioritize
  • societal expectations
  • career advancement
  • personal development
  • higher education
  • changing dynamics
  • norms
  • long-term partnership
  • maturity
  • self-awareness
  • relationship readiness
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