The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010

The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010
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The chart compares the results of three surveys on absenteeism in European
country
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in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010.
Overall
,
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the most absenteeism was because of illness in 2000, and the least one was because of stress in 2005. As the chart shows, because of illness community did not go to work 45%
responders
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in 2000, and in 2005 were more than in 2010, 40% and 35%, respectively. Because of stress society did not go to their
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6%
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in 2000, and in 2005 were less than in 2010, 5% and 13%. Because of personal
needs
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the crowd did not come to work 15%
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in 2000, and in 2005 people who did not come
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more than in 2010, 22% and 20%. The next reason was family responsibilities. Because of
this
issue the most skipping year was 2000, and in 2005 and 2010 were similar. The next problem was unexpected problems. In 2005 and 2010 the figure
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similar 17%, and in 2000
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10% of respondents.
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