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the table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002.

the table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countires in 2002.
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The table illustrates the percentage of consumer expenditure in Ireland, Italy, Spain,
Sweden
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 and
turkey
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Turkey
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 on three different consumer goods in the year 2002.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Turkey spent more amount on the first and
last
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 group, which are food, drinks or tobacco and leisure or education, respectively.
In contrast
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,
Sweden
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 spent the least amount on clothes and shoes. In terms of the first category, Turkey stands at the top with the
spendings
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spending
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 of about 32.14% and Ireland comes second with 28.91%.
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, Italy,
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and Spain
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Spain
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Spain's
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spendings
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spending
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 range from 16% to 18%.
Whereas
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,
Sweden
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 spent only 15.77%.
Furthermore
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, the second category was clothing and footwear in which Italy spent 9% and
Sweden
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 about 5.40%. The national spending in
this
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 area for the remaining three nations averaged around 6.5%.
However
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, In the
last
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 area, all five countries spent below 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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