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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line chart provides key information about the Australian export to Japan, the United
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, China and India through the time from 1990 to 2012. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that China experienced a significant increase.
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, Japan and the US represent high ratios in the beginning but after
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 they start to decrease.
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, India showed the lowest numbers in the whole interval.
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 the data shown, Japan represented the highest percentage in 1990, with approximately 27%, but their rate plunged in the year of 1995, and they
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 to decrease to almost 18%. In 1990, the United States began with a slightly above 10%, but after
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 their percentage started to fluctuate during the whole period until it reached less than 10%. In terms of China, their rate was lower than 5 per cent, but after 2000, it soared to almost 30%, which indicates the highest percentage in the graph. India
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, remained constant until 2000, after that their figures consistently increased to 8% by 2012.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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