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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram chart below illustrates the changes that took place in three different branches of
crime
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 in Newport city centre from 2003–2012.
Overall
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, the provided graph shows the fluctuation of three areas of
crime
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 during 2003–2012, where
burglary
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 and car
theft
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 have higher rates than
theft
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 from the person.
Firstly
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,
burglary
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 showed the highest
rate
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 at the beginning of 2003, and its peak was in 2004 when the number of burglaries was around 3,400.
However
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, after 2004 it showed a declining tendency, and in 2008 it reached its lowest point with 1,100
crime
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 rates.
Furthermore
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, in 2009
burglary
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 proportion was slightly high, and during 2009–2012 its fluctuation was around 1,500.
Secondly
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, robbery had the lowest amount of numbers in Newport City, and its
rate
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 variation was between 500 to 700 every year.
On the other hand
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, car
theft
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 had significantly high
crime
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 rates. Particularly in 2003, it had 2,800 incidents, and from 2003 to 2006, it showed a slight decline in its dominance.
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, from 2007 to 2012, it showed substantial growth, and
at the end
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 of 2012, its
crime
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rate
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 was around 3,000 incidents. Taking everything into consideration, between 2003–2012 in Newport Center, robbery had the lowest
crime
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rate
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,
while
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burglary
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 and car
theft
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 had gradually fluctuating
tendenc
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tendency
tendencies
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, burglary, theft, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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