The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant
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The given charts show the proportion of
public's
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the public's
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total spending in a certain European country was spent on various commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. In 1958, people spent their money mostly on housing and clothing.
In addition
, entertainment costs more money as well. But in 2008, the
overall
trend changed and
community
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the community
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started to spend much more money on food and luxury goods than on clothing and entertainment in comparison with
in
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1958. The amount of buying clothes had been decreasing. In 1958, the clothing commodity consisted 32%, but in 2008,
this
indicator significantly dropped and was almost the lowest percentage (12%). The using of transport hasn't been increased over the years.
This
service was the third lowest point in 1958, but in 2008, that was the least. The entertainment in people's lives constantly changed. It was 18% in 1958 and in 2008 that was 16%. Though housing was not the most costs in 1958, it was the most of housing
all
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services in 2008.
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