The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities is by reducing the need for people to travel from home to work , shopping and education.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

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Many
civillians
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say that reducing
traffic
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can only be done by limiting the usage of
transports
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. I believe that making and redesigning new
roads
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can limit it from happening .
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, Japan has one of the best
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comparing
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to other nations,
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to that
traffics are
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traffic is
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hardly seen or heard
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either
by news or social media.A lot of people believe that having a timetable
on
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hours
where
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when
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others go
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their jobs, shopping and education might be a solution to stop
traffic
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.
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is a controversial idea because we can't control societies by making their needs hard to reach because
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absurd to actually believe that.
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,
traffic
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these days
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out of hand and sadly there is no ideal way to stop it , everyone
are
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suggesting but none is actually ready for
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change.
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, Kuwait
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started being more strict on how many cars you can own , usage of phone
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driving ,
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and crossing
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roads
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and
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this
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change
have
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got
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few
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crowds furious. Laws aren't designed to please everyone , it's made to prevent harm from happening and
reducing
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it .Some believe that the reason behind
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traffic
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dilema
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dilemma
is that many
dont
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don't
respect the law or the need for it , they just want the other drivers to understand
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,to that it was made clear through social media by drivers they were protesting about the new laws.
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, I believe having a gap between what time you can arrive and leave is wonderful.
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, those who live far can promise to arrive earlier than others between 20-30 minutes and can leave before their colleague and by that state
its
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an agreement that will
definately
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definitely
help in
reduce
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and limiting
traficc
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traffic
. In conclusion,
traffics
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traffic
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can be limited in a way but sadly it will be a controversial way but if we gave the workers the benefit
for
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coming early to work and organizing the
roads
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and adding new shortcuts
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will be an easy achievement to be done in any region.
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accuracy
Be careful with spelling errors such as 'civillians', 'traffics', and 'dilema'. Such mistakes can sometimes distract readers.
structure
Consider structuring your essay into clearer paragraphs for better readability. Each paragraph should ideally have one main idea.
supporting details
More detailed examples and explanations could strengthen your main points. For instance, expand on how redesigning roads would work in other cities.
task response
Your essay introduces a clear position on the topic, and you make an effort to support your main ideas with examples.
structure
You've successfully included both an introduction and a conclusion, providing a framework for your argument.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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