The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health. To what extent do you agree with these views?

Many civilians say that the increasing

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of fast

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have influenced

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, others suggest that the caregivers are the ones

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to blame because of the lack in their

childs

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child

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, I strongly suggest

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changing the

childrens

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food

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intake to some greens ,

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proteins

protein

and few carbs

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would not

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harm anyone because any

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we see is due

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way those minors are taken care of .Some people

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for

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example, think that parents with kids on the chubby side should be held

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custody because

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will not only

effect

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the number on scale or their weight it will limit the child's movement and the way he can function during classes .

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, there was a study back in 2008 by Mathew Simpson on how

obesity

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can affect kids during classes on how they communicate , understand and do in exams.

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increasing number of overweight

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suggested a law in 2003 by ,

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for

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limit

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rising

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numbers

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.

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, some nations us as the

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and regions around

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have not

changed their

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industry despite

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the law

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law

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apply

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.

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to that those areas are the reason for the increasing

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, I highly suggest law

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appointment

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, all

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grease and fatty

food

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one sees due

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accessibility and the

social-media

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have made us see

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as

norm

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, despite the risks .

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us not

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and

to use

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the

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media

such

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twitter

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instagram

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youtube

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to reach as many as we can to reduce those high

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. In conclusion , I hardly believe that parents are the ones behind the big

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we see on scales and

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obesity

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