"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.
Many civilians say that preventing diseases is a better choice than curing
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it can be. I firmly believe that prevention can help in Correct your spelling
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, why would preventation
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prevention
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that alarms the body into making more white blood cells , by that the body would be ready for any attack. Mark Richards and Joesph Kelly have done studies on how to use the genome into
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task achievement
Your response addresses the task, but there are areas where you could deepen your analysis. Clearly define your stance early on and make sure all your points consistently support this position.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your ideas are clearly structured. While you have an introduction and conclusion, the body paragraphs should be more logically organized. Consider using clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
task achievement
You've included relevant examples to support your points, such as the reference to the coronavirus pandemic.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing your argument.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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