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You stayed at a hotel to attend a company meeting, and you were dissatisfied with your stay. Write a letter to the meeting organizer. In your letter: Provide the details of your meeting Explain what you were dissatisfied with Suggest what the hotel should do to resolve the issue.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to provide feedback on my dissatisfaction
while
 staying in a hotel to attend a company meeting. As it was a really important meeting for our company and we met plenty of foreign delegates there. I consider myself a fortunate staff of my organisation as I learned a lot of useful things regarding new projects.
This
 meeting was about the new launch of our company all over the world.
Although
, it was an exciting conference
but
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there was trouble with the hotel's WiFi connection. It was not working properly and some of our presentations
was
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 not loading.
This
 issue made our meeting
little
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 hard because we had to explain everything without audiovisuals. I would like to suggest you
to
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 towards fixing their internet connection so that other visitors will not have to encounter the same problem. Yours Faithfully, Harmeet Kaur
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task achievement
Consider providing more details about how the meeting was affected by the WiFi issue. For example, specify how crucial audiovisuals were to the presentations.
coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses specifically on one idea, making sure your dissatisfaction details and suggestions are clearly separated.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and add a polite tone to the letter.
task achievement
The letter maintains a suitable tone for addressing a meeting organizer, showing respect and clarity.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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