The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mailservices companies from 1920 to 2000.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mailservices companies from 1920 to 2000.

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amount

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the amount

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of parcels delivered by two big

mailservices

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mail services

email services

company

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companies

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throughout

years

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the years

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from 1920 to 2000.

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fedex

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FedEx

shown

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showed

has shown

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decreasing

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a decreasing

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trend

while

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TNT

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has

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relatively

grew

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grown

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throughout

years

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the years

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. In 1920,

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fedex

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FedEx

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was

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more popular, the number of

parcel

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parcels

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delivered by

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fedex

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FedEx

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was

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three times higher than

TNT

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. In 1930, both

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fedex

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FedEx

and

TNT

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grew higher than in 1920. In 1940,

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fedex

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FedEx

reached its peak

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with

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almost 25000 parcels delivered in a year

while

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TNT

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apply

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slightly rose

1940

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in 1940

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. After

reached

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reaching

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its peak number,

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fedex

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the fedex

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apply

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sharply decreased until

its

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reached its lowest in 1960.

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the other hand,

TNT

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apply

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continously

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continuously

grew higher in 1960 before

its

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slightly decreased in 1970. After

reached

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reaching

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its lowest point in 1960,

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fedex

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FedEx

climb

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climbed

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upward in 1970 and

continously

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continuously

grow

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grew

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until 1980. In 1980,

TNT

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dramatically increased

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its

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services to more than its amount in 1970 and

continously

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continuously

grow

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grew

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until its peak number in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fedex, tnt with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

154 words

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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons of this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

In recent years, there has been a significant advancement in AI and automation technologies. Some argue that these technologies will lead to widespread job displacement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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