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The table shows the expenses of a used bookstore in Scotland for the firts and last month of the same year. Summarize the information and make comparison where relavant.

The table shows the expenses of a used bookstore in Scotland for the firts and last month of the same year. Summarize the information and make comparison where relavant.
The given table illustrates all the expenses of a used
bookstore
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 in Scotland for
January
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 and
December
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in
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2018.
Overall
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, the total expenses of the
bookstore
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 relatively increased in
December
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.
Moreover
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, all the expenses increased in
December
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 compared to
January
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 except wages
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benefits and utilities.
This
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bookstore
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 spent
overall
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 4758
dollars
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 in
January
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, and in
December
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, the total expense increased to 5671
dollars
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. The highest expense of the
book store
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bookstore
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 is rent which was 3222
dollars
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 in
January
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, and
this
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 number increased to 4909 in
December
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.
Similarly
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, In
January
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, the
bookstore
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 spent 444
dollars
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in
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 other purposes, and it increased to 599
dollars
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 in
December
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.
However
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, in
January
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, the cost of utilities was 455
dollars
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,
while
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 it decreased to 265
dollars
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 in
December
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.
Likewise
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, the cost of wages and benefits
were
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was
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 260
dollars
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 in
January
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, which declined to 226
dollars
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 in
December
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bookstore, january, december, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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