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n some places young people find it difficult to communicate with older people why is this what are the solutions

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For most people, one of the widely discussed
issue
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 nowadays is
owning
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 trouble
to communicate
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 with senior citizens. I admit that
discussion
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 with mature adults became tough and
grueling
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. One of the main aspects of the problem is
generational
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the generational
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 gap.
In other words
, elders may have different values, opinions, or ways of thinking, making it harder to relate to or
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understand each other. Namely, teens often use informal language,
such
 as slang, or digital communication,
while
 seniors may prefer formal face-to-face conversations. Some older individuals may see the use of informal language as impolite or unprofessional, especially in formal or intergenerational settings. To tackle
this
 concern, youth should look for topics of mutual interest, like hobbies, current events, or family stories, to create a comfortable space for conversation. Using language and tones that match the formality of the dialogue,
avoiding
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 excessive slang or overly casual expression may be the easiest and so the best way to get
along with
golden-agers
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. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to
a
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 conclusion that effective communication and mutual understanding with respect, may lead
for
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the
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stronger bonds between two generations. Generation Z and X would be able to connect on a deeper level, whether in
family
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 community
,
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 or
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 professional settings. So it would be great when both sides work to understand each other and reduce the chances of misunderstandings or unnecessary conflicts.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention particular hobbies or events that might bridge the generational gap.
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Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to enhance the overall flow. You might want to use clear linking words or phrases.
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Your introduction clearly presents the topic and gives a glimpse of your perspective.
coherence and cohesion
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