Some people believe that to be a successful sportsperson, one needs to have a natural ability. Others think that hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many civilians believe that ones need to have natural abilities to be a successful athlete
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, some think hard work and practice would reach anyone to those abilities. I believe that athletes are made by determination , hard work and a lot of patience. In addition
, to that working hard on anything will reach you to any goal you have in mind and think of. For example
, boxers and football players are made by practice and not giving up because it needs many trials to apply . Hower
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and ability will be a waste and will not be enough to be a great sportsperson .Submitted by dr.hessahaljalahma on
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structure
Ensure your essay is clearly structured with separate paragraphs for introduction, discussion, and conclusion. This helps guide your reader through your argument.
cohesion
Use transition words and phrases effectively to connect your ideas and make the argument flow more naturally.
support
Support your points with more specific examples and elaborate on them to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You have effectively discussed both viewpoints on the topic and presented your opinion clearly.
conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and reinforces your opinion.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion