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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar graph illustrates the results of a survey about
people
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's hot
drinks
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drink
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 buying and drinking habits in five
differnt
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different
 cities in Australia in the
last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, it's clear to say that most of the time
people
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went
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go
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 to a cafe,
moreover
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.
people
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 don't prefer to buy fresh coffee.
insted
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Instead
 they tend to buy instant coffee than buying a fresh
one
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ones
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. in terms of going to a cafe,
people
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 from Hobart and Melbourne got the highest percentage they got nearly between 62% and 65%.
on the other hand
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,
people
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 from Adelaide got the lowest which was below 40%.
also
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people
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 from Brisban got the second lowest above 50% slightly.
moreover
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,
people
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 from Sydney the capital of Australia weren't far away from the first two cities they got above 60%.
According to
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 what
it
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is
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 shown,
people
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favoraites
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favourites
 to buy drinks that have been made before rather than buying
it
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them
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 fresh. Hobart and Brisban's numbers were first with approximately 50%.
wereas
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whereas
 Melbourne and Adelaide's
value
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values
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 were under 50% moderately.
fourthermore
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Furthermore
, Sydney's
percent
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percentage
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 was close to the rest with more than 40%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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