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Write a letter in which you need a letter of recommendation for university admission

Dear Sir, I am writing
formally
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 request to refer me for the Master’s in Zoology
in
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 the esteemed reputed University of Toronto, Ontario. It
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 been my privilege to work with you during my Bachelor’s Degree in Science. Recently, I applied for expert-level research in
field
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 of Zoology and I cracked
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 exam to get enrolled in
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 study.
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, I fulfilled all the admission requirements still
they
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need a separate sponsorship letter from the previous instructors.
Due to
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this
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 reason, I required a certificate that reflects my prior work experience in various lab experiments, well-equipped knowledge of chemicals
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preservation of species in formaldehyde. I would not get
pertake
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partake
 unless the submission of
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 letter. During my college days, I received many rewards from the zoology department of Punjabi University,India for my excellent performance in the discovery of new species of Ants in Kerala, India during the year 2020.
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, I submitted 5 projects on the diverse anatomy and physiology of land and marine fauna. Could you please provide me
recommendation
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a recommendation
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 letter for the
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 process of enrollment? I greatly appreciate your great efforts and support during my all prior
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. I look forward
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 your positive response. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Sarab

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coherence cohesion
The letter could benefit from a clearer organization. Consider separating different ideas into distinct paragraphs for improved readability.
task achievement
Ensure that your request for a recommendation is clearly stated at the beginning of the letter to immediately inform the reader of the letter's purpose.
task achievement
The letter politely requests a recommendation and provides specific reasons for the request, such as past accomplishments and future plans, which effectively supports the need for the recommendation.
task achievement
The tone is formal and professional, which is suitable for a letter requesting a recommendation.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, contributing to a polite and respectful tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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