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The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#information #uk #population #predictions #features #comparisons
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The chart shows information about how people over 65
ages
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are
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 in the UK and how they will be in the year 2035.
Overall
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, the chart
display
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displays
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 the most over will be in Wales in the future
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, the least common was in Northern Ireland in
1985s
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1985
. First of all, In 2035 ,
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the percentage
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 of the population aged 65 and over will be increasing from England to
wales
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 to
made
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 up above 25 %
then
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 the rate of the ageing population going to decrease in
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apply
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general .
On the other hand
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, England in 1985 showed 15%
then
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 it has been rose to hit a peak number
around
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 16 per
cen
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cent
. In the year
1985
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1985,
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 the figure decreased to under 15 per cent in Scotland .
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However
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 in
Northen
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Northern
 Ireland percentage of
an
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apply
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older people
were
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was
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 hitting a low to
accounted
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 for just above 10 pro port . In the
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Uk,
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Uk
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UK
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 the figure has been rising to back 15 %.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ageing population
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Predictions
  • Proportion
  • Region/Regional
  • Statistics
  • Gradual change
  • Elderly
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare
  • Birth rate
  • Comparative analysis
  • Trend
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