47.Some people thing that lawbreakers should be sent to prison. However, others think that better talent among those should be made to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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we see police arresting lawbreakers every time and out of the blue they come back out again with the same habits.As far as I am concerned all of them are talented and get a better job. From my point of view, a talented lawbreaker could be resourceful, as far as I am concerned, the government must focus on talented

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of buildings I firmly believe if we train our talented lawbreakers we can grant them a good life. Meanwhile,I know no one is going to accept it.The most significant aspect of

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is that no one trusts a lawbreaker.

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I still believe that a person can change . The government must look for a potential solution to change the lives of these people.I usually think about how

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, I think lawbreakers must be provided with basic human ethics education, if every prison had a small classroom set up ,which provides them with diplomas

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Lawbreakers
Incarceration
Deterrence
Rehabilitation
Recidivism
Community Service
Restorative Justice
Society integration
Punishment
Overcrowding
Reintegration
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