Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Impoverishment is one of the significant
pradicament
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predicament
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which exists
worlwide
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worldwide
. Most of the multitudes are suffering from the lack of money and each country uses various ways to rectify these issues. There are many things that are responsible for
this
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and many ways to
rsolve
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resolve
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this
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and
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are
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discussed
below.
To begin
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with
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the factors those are responsible
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as unemployment which plays a vital role
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a
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poor. Masses are unable to get
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jobs
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due to
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overpolulation
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overpopulation
and less demand
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for
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jobs. Henceforth, people cannot
fullfill
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fulfil
their living expenses. As per
yearly
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a yearly
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survey in
india
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India
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,
aroung
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around
80% community have low income below the
poverty
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line.
Furthermore
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,
infliation
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inflation
also
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helps to increase
poverty
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For instance
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, if
government
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the government
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raises the prices of everything day by day and folks
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have
sufficent
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sufficient
income to meet those charges
then
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they cannot afford
thier
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their
living
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standards which in short causes
peeps
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people
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to poor. In terms of solutions,
firstly
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,
government
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the government
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should fix their basic salary that should be
according to
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the minimum requirement for the people to
fullfill
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fulfil
their needs like, pay needs to be above the
poverty
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line.
secondly
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, we should focus on how to decline population by
awaring
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awarding
society and by providing education
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related
to the demerits of the
overpopultion
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overpopulation
.
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to
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, The head of
country
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the country
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should offer some basic things to the poor man at some discounts just to
accommplish
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accomplish
their needs. At
last
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, as per my
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, both
government
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the government
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and society
is
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responsible for
this
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poverty
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and to get rid
from
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of
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this
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dilemma both should work together to see some good results.
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your points more logically. Make sure each paragraph deals with a single idea and follows logically from the previous one.
task achievement
Develop your ideas more thoroughly. Use specific and relevant examples to substantiate your points more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states the aim of the essay and that your conclusion summarises your main points while stating your final opinion or recommendation.
task achievement
You've done well to identify key reasons for poverty like unemployment and inflation and suggest solutions such as increasing basic salary and managing population growth.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, giving it a decent structure overall.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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