The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK (expressed in percentage terms). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the

UK (expressed in percentage terms).

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph provides a
comparsion
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comparison
of access to four different types of modern technology in British
papolution
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population
over a
period
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of 7 years.
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, it is clear all devices recorded increases over the entire
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, with CD player
was
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as
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the
primarly
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primary
primarily
main in UK families. Internet access
introduced
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was introduced
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in the year of 1998. On the one hand, in the year
of
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1996
home
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the home
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combuter
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computer
and CD player
was
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were
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the
primarly
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primary
primarily
two serves people
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used
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them with 35 and 60 per cent,
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respectively
,
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both had
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steadily
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increase until the end of the
period
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by
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recording 60 per cent for home
combuter
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computer
and 80 per cent for DC player.
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, mobile phones had a
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significant
increase, starting woth19% in the year
of
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1996 and in the next two years
recorded
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22%,
then
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had a
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jump
to 42 in the middle of the
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,
then
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continue
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continued
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its rise to 70 in 2003.
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people
has
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started
use
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using
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internet access in 1998
then
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increased
till
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to
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43% of people who
use
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used
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the internet
in
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at
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the end of the
period
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adoption rate
  • Accessibility
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Analysis
  • Compare
  • Technological advancement
  • Consumer behavior
  • Economic factors
  • Correlation
  • Percentage
  • Rapid increase
  • Initial percentage
  • Steady growth
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