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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows a comprehensive overview of the production trend of three primary fuel sources in
UK
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the UK
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 over a
19 year
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19-year
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 period. The unit of measurement used in energy is millions of
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, natural gas shows a substantial rise over the period.
While
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 the other two, petroleum and coal, show fluctuating
movement
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movements
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 throughout the years.
To begin
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 with, natural gas started
around
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at around
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 40
million
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tonnes
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 and slowly increased to above 40
million
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 in 1981 until it reached
peaking
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peak
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 up to 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000.
In contrast
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, coal production showed a downward trend,
initially
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 to 80 units in 1981, and
then
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rebounding
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rebounded
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 greatly, it
dips
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dipped
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 to 40
million
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tonnes
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,
then
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 went up slightly to 60
million
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 from 1986 to 1991 and it
plateaud
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plateaued
plateaus
plateau
 until it
experiences
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experienced
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 continuous drop throughout the year. For petroleum, starts at around 90
million
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 metric
tonnes
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 and rises
until
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to
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 140 units in 1986,
decline
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declines
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 to 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 1991 and
climb
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climbs
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 up again for the subsequent year until 2000 reaching its highest consumption at approximately 150
millions
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million
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tonnes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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