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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
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The illustration demonstrates the
complexe
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complex
 process and the
mains
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 steps of producing bricks which are made for the building industry. First of all, clay, which is the primary component, is dug out.
Next,
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it placed on
metal
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the metal
a metal
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 grid which
are
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is
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 put on a rolling belt and it is mixed with sand and water.
This
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 composing is either
putting
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put
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 in a mould or is cut by a wire to produce bricks.
Secondly
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, they are dried in
a
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 oven for 24-48h00.
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, they are heated at moderate and
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 extremely
hight
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temperature
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temperatures
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 to
finally
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 be cooled in a special chamber for 2 or 3 days.
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, they are stored together and
then
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 delivered by truck.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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