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Many people today are worried about cyber crime such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does cyber crime cause and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and businesses to take?

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of
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 and how to fight with it or control it. In
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 I will talk about the problems and solutions. To start with, the main issue that occurs to many is identity theft. Not being very safe with your personal
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, storing it in online files or having copies of your documents in all of your technologies can result in easy access for hackers.
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, with someone’s
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 they can pretend to be someone they are not, resulting in having
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 relationships with others messed up, posting inappropriate content on social media and in
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 way making
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 picture worse to the public. The second problem is having one’s technologies fully hacked.
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 can lead to total failure of the device and it will not be used ever again, as well, the person will lose a lot of money in order to buy a new one.
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, there are several solutions and actions that can be taken to prevent these issues. With the first one being very simple. Storing your personal
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 and passwords on a paper sheet. No hacker would ever be able to access something
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 not online, resulting in no damage caused.
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, having a reliable anti-virus system is a great option too. If
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software is
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 with good reviews and a reasonable price, it is a valid option in order to keep your
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 online.
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 but not
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least, businesses could take part in
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 prevention by investing some money in new anti-cheat and anti-hacking programs, with some funds and a great programming team would
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 a great result,
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 in
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 crimes.
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, varied reasons have given rise to,
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 I firmly believe steps
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 as online safety,
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 storage not online and new
softwares
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software
 must be taken to tackle the worrisome situation.

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Develop ideas a bit further with more specific examples, especially in the solutions section, to reinforce your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure, starting with the problems and moving onto the solutions.
task achievement
The main points are supported with logical explanations, such as how identity theft can affect personal relationships.
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