Many people today are worried about cyber crime such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does cyber crime cause and what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and businesses to take?

With technology becoming more and more popular, it has reached the most of the communities.
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that is
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a sign humanity is progressing, some
people
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are finding ways to take advantage of the inexperienced. Websites, contactless services and software
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are newcomers,
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mostly the latest generations are knowledgeable about them, leaving older generations in the dust. Since
software
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the software
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is
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a vast place,
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cyber crime
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cybercrime
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is nothing new. It can happen anywhere: an innocent ad,
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bank website or a normal
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. Individuals who commit
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crimes often mask them to seem as harmful as possible,
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bringing a
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or idea,
people
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could not pass. These result in online robbery, when the victim reveals their bank card information,
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addresses
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leaked, and an invasion of privacy.
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some hidden traps could seem
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urgent,
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example
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a
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about issues with a bank account,
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if it truly would be urgent, often the person would be getting a call. It is important to be wary and check from whom the
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is from and whether it seems as an official deliverer or not. If it is an ad, it is better to go directly to the website of interest and check there or google the item
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. Often
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attackers lurk for
people
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in sketchy, illegal websites and it is advisable for
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to avoid them. It is in an individual's best interest to get a security app installed
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a computer to protect from
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‘innocent’ ads, who could try to get through the firewall.
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Cyber crime
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is getting bigger by the
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since tracking down offenders is much harder than chasing them down the street. With minimum
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consequences,
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the crime rates are growing, which will result in
breach
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a breach
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in
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privacy. It is best to be knowledgeable about the types of
cyber
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crimes and be cautious.

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task achievement
Your introduction could give a clearer view of the problems and solutions. Try to state them outright.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea so the reader can follow easily. Use linking words like 'first,' 'next,' and 'finally.'
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Add more examples to support your ideas. This will make your points stronger and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your conclusion wraps up your ideas clearly and restates the main points briefly.
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You have identified important problems related to cyber crime. Your understanding of the issue is clear.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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