The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry
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The given
process
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by which
bricks
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are made for the building industry.
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, the procedure consists of seven stages, commencing with digging up the
clay
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and culminating in delivery. In the first stage, the
clay
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is dug up from the ground by a giant digger. After being dug, the
clay
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is placed onto a metal grid,
that is
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used to break it into small pieces. The roller helps
this
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process
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.
Following
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this
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step, the water and sand are added to the
clay
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, and
this
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blend is either placed into a mould or
is
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cut off by a wire cutter.
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these
bricks
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are dried in the drying oven for 24-48 hours. In the subsequent stage, the
bricks
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have tried a heating and cooling
process
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. They are heated in a kiln at moderate and high temperatures, and later a cooling
process
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in a chamber for 48-72 hours. Before getting to the final stage, the
bricks
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are packed and delivered by a delivery truck.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, bricks, clay with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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