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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates components of
Gross
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the Gross
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 Domestic Product from
IT
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the IT
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 and
service
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industry
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 in the UK in the
period
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 from 1992 to 2000. The vertical axis shows the percentage quantity of both spheres,
while
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 the horizontal axis provides time
period
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 data for each
indicators
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indicator
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.
Overall
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 , both charts had a general rise in
outcome
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outcomes
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 since 1992. Over the
period
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 of 8 years,
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GDP
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the GDP
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 of
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 has risen
for
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by
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 10
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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Service
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the Service
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industry
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 did not
changed
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change
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 a lot and had a slight rise in
GDP
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. The highest scores of
GDP
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 from IT and
Service
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 spheres were in 2000, accounting for approximately 15 and 8
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively. The lowest scores were in 1992 made up around 6 and 4
percent
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accordingly
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. Despite the positive tendency,
IT
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the IT
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industry
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 had a quiet dip in 1996, but
nevertheless
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, it continued to rise and had a rapid increase in percentage equal to 12 in 1998.
While
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 the IT sphere
GDP
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 was rising,
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Service
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the Service
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industry
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has
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remained approximately constant, yet had a remarkable growth
for
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of
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 2.5
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percent
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per cent
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 from 1992 to 1994. In conclusion, on the whole,
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GDP
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the GDP
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 of IT and
Service
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 industries have been rising, which shows the development of the United Kingdom in spheres over the given
period
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry, period, gdp, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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