The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food resaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food resaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The column graph illustrates the way repeatedly that fast food in restaurants was eaten by people in the USA in 2003, 2006 and 2013.
It is clear that
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the percentage of demand for going to the restaurant has been more in once a
week
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and once or twice a month. It can be seen individuals were going to the restaurant nearly 31 per cent once a
week
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in 2003,
while
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it was increased to approximately 33 per cent over time. In 2013, the number of people who were going out to eat fast food had decreased.
Although
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the proportion between once a
week
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and once or twice a month was similar compared to other classes of times , in 2006 and 2013, once a month was exactly the opposite compared to once a
week
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. Several times a
week
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had exactly the same shape as Once a
week
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.
First,
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in 2003, was less than in 2006 and over time, in 2013, demand to go out was the latest compared to previous years. People were eating out at the same rate, 15 per cent, in 2006 and 2013 a few times a year,
however
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, it was less in 2003. The classification of every day and never was almost the same amount.
However
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, in never classifying the percentage was a little more.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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