You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • explain why you wouid like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir/Madam, I have recently

came

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across an advertisement in an Australian magazine and found out that you are looking for someone after six

yearold

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year old

year-old

child

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children

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while

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also

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live

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with a family. After giving

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idea a thought, I may be a right fit for

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opportunity. Australia is a place which I always

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about and wanted to visit. It has rich ecosystems I want to learn about, beautiful architecture, museums,

culinary

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and much more.

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job would be a first step to my dream even though I understand the fact

about

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being 100% committed to the job. It is not an easy task to find a suitable person

nowaday

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I understand how difficult it might be to let a stranger inside

family

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the family

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. My personal background will make you feel safe. I am myself coming from a big family with many kids. The were times when I had to spend

week

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alone with my siblings and as

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adult

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their

life

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and safety were in my

hand

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More over

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I have experience in looking after children and would be more than welcome to give you professional references in

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regard. Kids love me and they seem to find and build meaningful relationships with them. Kids love me and listen to me, especially when it comes to completing tasks they don't find

exiting

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and boring. During the time I look after or babysit children we focus on interpersonal development and difficult games help develop brain and interpersonal skills. So don't worry your child is going to be in safe hands. During my free time if it happens to be I would focus on exploring nature and attractions like museums, parks and restaurants. Possibly I would take fishing or surfing courses. Looking forward to

hear

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beak

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from you. Faithfully yours, Sofiia Lyefi

Alla Mon Dec 09 2024

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph contains a single main idea to improve coherence.

task response

Proofread the letter for minor grammatical errors and typos to enhance task response.

task response

The letter successfully addresses all parts of the task, providing reasons for interest in the job, detailing suitability, and mentioning how free time will be spent.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately formal for the context.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

301 words

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The Greeting

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