The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The column graph illustrates some
datas
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data
at
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the
British
about
amount
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the amount
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of pupils who studied knowledge of
computer
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computers
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and
compare
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compares
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thesem
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these
them
percentages between
the
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men
and
the
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women
in 2010, 2011 and 2012. It can be seen the proportion of
British
home
students
had been more compared to the international
students
and the
women
students
almost had
been
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less
compare
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comparing
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with the
men
.
It is clear that
the female generation always
were increasing
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increased
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over
the
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apply
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time in both international and
the
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British
home
students
. In 2010, the rate of the
British
home
students
was at approximately 33 per cent. It climbed to half in both two other years.
As well as
, the international pupils had steady progress over time, respectively.
In contrast
, not only the
native's
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male
students
was sharply less than the
women
, in 2010, but
also
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abroad
students
almost was close to it.
Moreover
, the rate of both
kind
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kinds
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of
students
was close to each other in 2012, at approximately 42 per cent and 39 per cent in the
British
home
students
and the international
students
, respectively. In 2010, the
men
and the
women
had similar
pattern
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patterns
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,
however
,
men
had just a little
more
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higher
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rate compared to the
women
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, men, women, home, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • depicts
  • analyze
  • peak
  • significant
  • comparison
  • subject matter
  • highlight
  • notable
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