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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of international visitors who
traveled
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travelled
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 to the
UK
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 for
holiday
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holidays
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, business
,
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apply
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 and
visit
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visits
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 to friends or relatives
from
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between
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 1989 and 2009.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of overseas tourists to the
UK
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 for all given purposes increased in 2009. The holiday purpose had the wildest fluctuations over the period. Notably, the amount of tourism for visiting
to
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apply
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friends or relatives had the lowest
number
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.
To begin
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 with, the
number
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 of people who visited the
UK
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 for a holiday had the highest fluctuations, with a massive jump from over 6
million
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 in 1989 to slightly below 10
million
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 in 1999, declining to below 8
million
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 in 2004, before increasing to above 8
million
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 in 2009.
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, the
number
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 of visitors for business trips began the period with below 6
million
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 and it decreased to approximately 4
million
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 before 1994, ultimately
this
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 steadily escalated to approximately 6
million
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 after 2004. The
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 to the
UK
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 to visit a friend or relative started
with
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at
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 below 4
million
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 and it steadily rose to above 6
million
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 in 2004. Despite
this
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 increase, it remained the lowest purpose.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, uk, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • statistics
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak periods
  • holidaymakers
  • business trips
  • educational tourism
  • significant increase/decrease
  • data interpretation
  • exponential growth
  • steady decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cultural events
  • tourist influx
  • graph analysis
  • quantitative change
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