Some people belive that robots are very important to human’s future development, whilw others believe they are dangerous and negatively affect society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some
people
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that
robots
are important to the human's
future
, there are others
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that
robots
are
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affecting
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negatively on it.
this
essay will explore whether
robots
have a
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positive
or negative impact on the
future
of
the
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humanity
, and my perspective on the topic will be
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provided at
the end. technology in general and
robots
in particular
have many advantages
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the
future
of
humanity
.
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Nowadays
, there are many applications where
robots
provide aid to
people
in many life aspects.
robots
are used in hospitals,
manufactures
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, stores and even houses. it helps
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doctors to be precise in
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surgeries
,
manufactures
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to
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and cars to
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. that
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to
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many
people
think life
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be easier in the
future
.
in
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the other hand, others consider
robots
would
effect
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affect
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the the
future
of
the
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humanity
negatively. if
robots
could be used in all of the
field
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, would it lead to
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jobs in the world for
human
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humans
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.
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employeer
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employer
employee
would benefit from
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the robot
a robot
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robot
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robots
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,
while
they do not need wages at all, they do not need
vecations
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vacations
vocations
and the work with high
persicion
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precision
.
although
,
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robots
can be
helpfull
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helpful
,
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it can cause a lot of damage. in
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conclusion
,
robots
certinly
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certainly
has
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an effect on the
future
of
the
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humanity
.
people
argued whether
this
effect is positive or negative
acccording
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according
to the different points of
veiw
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view
. some
people
think they need
robots
in the
future
in many life
aspect
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aspects
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. others think
robots
will replace
humens
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humans
. my personal opinion is that
robots
are important now and will still be important in the
future
.
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