The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts compare the online
sales
for 4 various retail sectors (electronics & appliance,food & beverage,video games,home
furnishing ) in Canada over the period of 5 years from 2005 to 2010.
Correct word choice
and home
Overall
, from the statistics, we can understand that online sales
of video games and food & beverage increased over the
time. Correct article usage
apply
However
, electronics & appliance
and home furnishings experienced Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
less sale
online.
Fix the agreement mistake
fewer sales
According to
the data, sales
of video games increased by 5% over the period of 5 years from 18% to 23% respectively, Notably, food & beverage showed 10
% increase from 2005 to 2010 and grew from 22% to 32%.
Correct article usage
a 10
Furthermore
, sales
of electronics and appliance
declined by 5% over the period of 5 years from 35% to 30% respectively, Notably, home furnishing experienced Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
10
% reduction from 2005 to 2010 and dipped from 25% to 15% respectively.Correct article usage
a 10
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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