Nowadays environmental problems are too big for individual countries or people to solve. We have reached stages where we need cooperation on an international level to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Our Mother Earth is facing serious environmental
issues
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, and these
issues
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are too significant to be handled by individual
countries
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alone. These
issues
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require attention and strong collaboration from all
countries
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across the world to address them. I firmly agree that environmental
issues
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are everyone's responsibility because they are global in nature.
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with, there are various environmental problems
such
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as
,
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climate change,
air
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pollution
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and other
environtmental
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environmental
problems. These
problem
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are not found only in one country but most of
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countries
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the countries
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face the same
issues
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.
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, In
indonesia
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especially in
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the capital
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city
Jakarta
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,
air
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pollution
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is
the
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serious
issue
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which
need
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attention not only from individuals but
asociety
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society
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. The same
issue
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also
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faced in Argentina.
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, The ecological
issue
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is a global
issue
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which means,
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that participating
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from all
countries
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need
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needs
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to tackle
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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, cars and other vehicles release carbon dioxide from burning fuel leading to
air
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pollution
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and other health
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. regardless
the
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geograpic
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geographic
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location,
air
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pollution
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had
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contaminated with
emission
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emissions
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.
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government cooperation across the world is very essential in
this
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stage
along with
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society to
sole
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solve
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these global
environtmental
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environmental
issues
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. In
conclussion
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conclusion
,
environtmental
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environmental
issues
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are complex and complicated,
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additionally
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it
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they
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impact our mother of earth, which
required
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attention from all
civilization
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civilizations
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along with
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support from
government
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governments
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across the
word
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world
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regardless
location
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of location
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task achievement
Strengthen your argument by providing specific and detailed examples that illustrate global environmental cooperation success stories or challenges.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your points are connected more fluidly with linking words and phrases to enhance the logical progression of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with a defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which helps in presenting the argument systematically.
task achievement
The introduction states your position clearly, and the conclusion reinforces your view on the necessity of international cooperation for environmental issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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