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Thw diagram below shows the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry

Thw diagram below shows the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry
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The diagram provides data on the process of making
bricks
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 for the building industry.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the process consists of 7 stages, beginning with claying and ending
up
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with delivering. The first step involves digging the clay from
ground
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the ground
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 with the help of
digger
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a digger
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.
Then
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,
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the digged
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digged
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dug
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 metal grid is rolled before being added sand and water to form a brick mixture, with
thick
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a thick
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 consistency. Following that,
bricks
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 are dried
during
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 24-48 hours. Having been parched,
bricks
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 are ready for the next steps of
the
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production. They are melted with the help of
kiln
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a kiln
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in
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 200°C-980°C moderately and
then
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in
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 higher
temperature
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temperatures
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 870°C-1300°C. After that, ready
bricks
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 are packaged, after being cooled
48
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for 48
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-72 hours in
cooling
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the cooling
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 chamber. In the final
stage
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stage,
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bricks
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 are delivered to a construction site to be used for
building
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the building
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 industry.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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