Some people think that exercise is the key to health, while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Huy Tran

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some argue that physical activity is the best way to get

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,others believe that

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a well-rounded eating

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is more important.Two aforementioned opinions will be discussed in the following paragraphs before presenting my personal perspective in the conclusion.

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are physically active will

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blood circulation,resilient

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muscle.The most basic activity to achieve these things is jogging or

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some sports like tennis,football,

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exercise will be prevent some common diseases

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.A recent research conducted at Havard University

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are free from common diseases and have

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,others consider that having a balanced

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a balanced and varied

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to provide the body with necessary nutrients.

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B,vitamins C and iron.

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the American Heart Association, a healthy

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to your daily meals will help you have nutritious and diverse

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fish and fresh meat to a person’s

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at least twice a week. In conclusion,from my standpoint

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physical activity and

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both of those things must go hand in hand for the body to get good

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Development of Ideas

Develop your points with more specific examples and details. While the points are clear, adding specific data or anecdotes can strengthen the argument.

Structure

The essay has a clear structure with a strong introduction and conclusion, effectively presenting both perspectives on the issue.

Use of Evidence

The use of evidence like the Harvard study and the mention of the American Heart Association adds credibility to the arguments.

Conclusion

The conclusion effectively synthesizes the main points of the essay by stating that both exercise and a balanced diet are essential for good health.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 7.0

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