Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Coherence and Cohesion

The introduction clearly presents both sides of the argument.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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paramount
evolutionary journey
tangible link
fostering
sense of belonging
architectural beauty
economic benefit
tourist attractions
preservation techniques
structural integrity
energy-efficient
sustainable architecture
cultural preservation
urban demands
contemporary lifestyles

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Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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