The diagram below shows the bread making process

The diagram provides data on the process of making

bread

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it is clear that

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the

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bread making

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bread-making

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process consists of five distinct stages in

this

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linear process, beginning with adding various necessary ingredients

as well as

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ending with making two types of

bread

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Bread

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has to go through a number of processes before it can be manufactured. In the

fisrt

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first

step, four different products, ranging from sugar and milk to egg and wheat are put into

bowl

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a bowl

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, before mixed until a uniform combination is achieved. After that, it is stirred with the help of

food

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a food

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processor. Having been blended,

dough

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the dough

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is kneaded to make

ready

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it ready

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for being

shoped

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shopped

shaped

shipped

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bread

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the bread

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is all ready after being put into two different ovens in order to take two types of shapes. Once the cooking stage is complete, the breads are packed for sale in supermarkets

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shops

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bread with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

147 words

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